Second draft stor board *rough experimental)

 Some experimental/rough drafts of a possible storyboard

Although the story board is rough it shows a more influence over the characters and, from the feedback of the earlier draft I have changed the shots to be tighter around the character and leave much less white space. I have also tightened the door closing shot to a close up of a the lower part of the door with the tail of a black coat disapearing as the door closes. This will imply the presence of another without ruining the suspense. However these drafts are rough and need to be improved, these are just the basic plan.

In the first page I could place the 5th shot inbetween 3 and 4 as it would give a more natural feel of surprise. However it does also work where it is as it allows for the character to move more naturally to the edge of the bed.